Peony farmでピッキングの仕事を始めたよ

English_Practice

I decided next job because my WWOOF host forced to finish this job. The peony farm grows peonies. I guess it is easier to say “botan” than “syakuyaku”.

Peony farm Application

I applied for this job on Facebook. However, I applied it in Japanese group so other tourist applied on backpakerbord. Nevertheless, it is not enough people. There is no accomodation so someone who has a car can apply for this job.

There are a lot of peonies farm in Christchurch or Timaru. I am working in Sheffield from Christchurch for 50 minutes by car. There are forteen of peonies and we harvest them from Octover to December. When it is rainy, we are day off. We have a work unless it is rainy.

Peony farm Working

We usually start working at 8 a.m. and finish at 5 p.m. but it depends on situation, we start working at 7 a.m. and finish at 6 p.m. The working is not difficult to harvest and cut buds. If it is strong windy, we should adopt stem straight next day.

When we harvest, we cut stem 60 cm left, idealy 65 cm left, and remove leaves. Personally, I was struggling with doing. It tooks for long time to cut. I can do smoothly because I was tought by my boss and administrator.

Moreover, we cut buds. It is not difficult because of just taking buds. However, we should remove buds which is small or grow beside. In addition, the height of flowers is short so that it is hard to cut buds with squatting. My back will be die.

Thought

I work like that in peony farm. It is hard every day unless it rains. However, colleague are very kind and friendly so I enjoy spending time. Sometimes, the working is so hard but there is no problem because it is good friendship. A Japanese man who does not speak English well came here, but he looks fun to talk with colleague. He is struglling with conversation. See you there.

日本語版

WWOOFでの仕事が半ば強制的に終わったので次の仕事が決まりました。Peony farmという芍薬を育てているファームになります。芍薬というより牡丹の仲間といったほうが伝わりやすいかもしれませんが。

Peony farm 応募について

この仕事はFacebookで応募をしました。ただ、日本人グループでの応募だったので他の海外の人はbackpackerboardというサイトから応募をしたと思います。まだ、少しだけ人手が足りないようですが…。宿泊施設はなく車を持ってる人で車中泊できる人が条件になっています。

PeonyはChristchurchかTimaruあたりが多いそうです。私のところはSheffield というChristchurchから50分ほどのところになります。花の種類は14くらいで10月から12月にかけて収穫を行います。雨の日だと休みになりますね。雨じゃなければ毎日仕事ですが。

Peony farm 仕事について

仕事は基本8時5時で状況によっては7時開始や6時終わりになったりもします。仕事内容自体は特に難しくなく収穫と蕾の切り取りを行います。風が強かった翌日は茎をまっすぐにする作業がありましたが。

収穫をするときは茎を60cm、理想だと65cm残して下部についている葉っぱを取り除きます。個人的には初めは苦戦をしました。思うように切れず時間がかかったので。私の上司や管理者の人にしっかり教わってスムーズになりました。

もう一つが蕾の切り取りですね。これは特に難しくなくただひたすら蕾を取るだけですね。ただ、メインの蕾を残してサイドに生えてるものや小さいものまで取り除く必要があります。また、花の背丈が低めなのでかがんで作業をするのが大変ですね。腰が死にそうです。

終わりに

といった感じでpeony farmでの作業をこなしています。雨が降らなければ毎日は大変ですが、周りの人達も親切かつフレンドリーなので楽しく過ごせています。大変なこともありますが、人間関係は全く問題ないのでかなり良いと思いますね。一緒にいる日本人の子も英語が全くできずに来ましたが、周りの人と楽しそうに会話をしていますし。苦戦はしてますが。ではでは。

AI採点

Excellent — this is a very realistic IELTS Writing Task 2–style narrative. Below is a complete IELTS Band assessment (Task Achievement / Coherence & Cohesion / Lexical Resource / Grammatical Range & Accuracy), with all errors explained line-by-line and corrected versions suggested.

🧾 Overall IELTS Band Estimate

Band 5.5 – 6.0 (Upper-Intermediate)
You communicate ideas clearly and in logical order, but grammar and vocabulary errors reduce accuracy and naturalness. Cohesion and lexical range are adequate, but frequent sentence-level mistakes (verbs, articles, plurals, collocations) keep it below Band 7.

📚 1. Task Achievement (≈ Band 6)

• ✅ You clearly describe the situation and tasks on the peony farm.
• ❌ Some sentences are grammatically confusing or unnatural, reducing clarity.
• ❌ A few points (e.g., “forced to finish this job”) could be expressed more precisely (“my WWOOF host ended my placement early”).

💡 Example revision

I started a new job on a peony farm after my WWOOF host unexpectedly ended my previous placement.

🧩 2. Coherence & Cohesion (≈ Band 6)

• ✅ Logical paragraphing (“Application,” “Working,” “Thought”).
• ❌ Linking devices are limited — you often use “However,” but rarely “Therefore,” “In addition,” or “As a result.”
• ❌ Repetition (“rainy,” “hard,” “work”) lowers flow.

💡 Improvement example

We usually work from 8 a.m. to 5 p.m.; however, the hours sometimes change depending on the weather.
As a result, we may start earlier or finish later.

🗣️ 3. Lexical Resource (≈ Band 6)

Good vocabulary variety (e.g., harvest, bud, accommodation), but:

• ❌ Spelling: accomodation → accommodation, backpakerbord → Backpackerboard, Octover → October, forteen → fourteen, struglling → struggling.
• ❌ Collocations: “the working is not difficult” → “the work is not difficult”; “my back will be die” → “my back is killing me.”
• ❌ Word choice: “administrator” → “supervisor” or “manager” fits better in farm context.

🧠 4. Grammatical Range & Accuracy (≈ Band 5.5)

Frequent but minor errors across tenses, articles, plurals, and verb forms. Below are detailed corrections 👇

✅ Example of a Polished Version (≈ Band 7+)

After my WWOOF host ended my previous job, I started working at a peony farm in Sheffield, about 50 minutes from Christchurch. Peonies are flowers similar to “botan” in Japanese.

I found this job through a Japanese Facebook group, while most other workers applied through Backpackerboard. Since the farm doesn’t provide accommodation, it’s only suitable for people who have cars and can sleep in them.

The farm grows about fourteen varieties of peonies, which we harvest from October to December. We don’t work on rainy days, but otherwise, we work almost every day. Normally, we start at 8 a.m. and finish at 5 p.m., though sometimes the schedule changes depending on the weather.

The work itself isn’t difficult — mainly harvesting and cutting buds. When harvesting, we cut the stems about 60–65 cm long and remove the lower leaves. At first, I struggled to do it neatly, but my supervisor taught me the correct way, and now I can do it smoothly. We also remove small side buds to leave only the main one. Because the flowers are low, we often have to squat, which makes my back sore!

Although the work can be hard, the people around me are kind and friendly, so I enjoy my time there. Even one Japanese coworker who can’t speak English well seems to have fun chatting with others. Overall, it’s a challenging but positive experience.

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